Reflection pt.2

1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?

My writing has put me through many paths. First of all, I feel that my intros, sentence structure, conclusions all improved. The first intro I had made a really weak appeal to my photo essay, but through many copy edits I improved with many taught strategies. My edit for my intro improved because the more I copy-edited, the concise it got. I started using better words like present tense and getting rid-off sledge hammer words and words that end with “ing”. I also just got straight to the point in order for my future audience to avoid being bored. My favorite writing strategy is “Simpler is Better”.

My sentence structure is my second improvement. I also feel great that I understood the writing format that article authors use like “the loop method”. I structured my intro and conclusion to establish a clear path for my reader to understand my photo essay story. I also collected the mind set to make my sentences short to let my clear ideas flow naturally.

My last improvement was towards my conclusion. My conclusion had a lot of scrambled Ideas in many sentences. I improved my conclusion through many copy-edits that dealt with stumbled paths to clear understanding. I improved my conclusion by adding a “wonder” line that makes people think about what I will do later on.

2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?

My basic weakness in writing is establishing transition paragraphs. Transition paragraphs are paragraphs that give a reader an idea with what’s going to happen next. I realize that this weakness can become a strength with multiple drafts to establish a mind set. I believe, once I have this strength I feel that my writing will be enforced greater.

3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.

My first draft of my photo essay included my beginning sentence of my introduction as a starter for my reader to under stand at first. The beginning sentence of my 1st draft is "Stephen x. pineda, an average 16-year old high school who had his main focus on his hobby as well as in putting outstanding effort in school ever since 9th grade." While going through the process of copy editing my photo essay entirely has improved by the last draft. My current beginning sentence of my final draft is "Before Reality Changers, I used to spend my Tuesday and Thursday afternoons at soccer practice while finding the time to maintain an average GPA with a blurry path to college. With the evaluation of coming from a road of distracted ideas to following a clear ideal path. After the whole process I see a big change of re-wording and see many different structures that explain greatly.

4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.

My main idea that I learned in writing is not the complicated words you put in text to make it sound real good but the simple words you scramble with flow and the sentences that are dedicated to be better refined.

This is due at the end of the day on Wednesday 5/27!