Reflection pt.2

1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?

My writing has put me through many paths. First of all, I feel that my intros, sentence structure, conclusions all improved. The first intro I had made a really weak appeal to my photo essay, but through many copy edits I improved with many taught strategies. My edit for my intro improved because the more I copy-edited, the concise it got. I started using better words like present tense and getting rid-off sledge hammer words and words that end with “ing”. I also just got straight to the point in order for my future audience to avoid being bored. My favorite writing strategy is “Simpler is Better”.

My sentence structure is my second improvement. I also feel great that I understood the writing format that article authors use like “the loop method”. I structured my intro and conclusion to establish a clear path for my reader to understand my photo essay story. I also collected the mind set to make my sentences short to let my clear ideas flow naturally.

My last improvement was towards my conclusion. My conclusion had a lot of scrambled Ideas in many sentences. I improved my conclusion through many copy-edits that dealt with stumbled paths to clear understanding. I improved my conclusion by adding a “wonder” line that makes people think about what I will do later on.

2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?

My basic weakness in writing is establishing transition paragraphs. Transition paragraphs are paragraphs that give a reader an idea with what’s going to happen next. I realize that this weakness can become a strength with multiple drafts to establish a mind set. I believe, once I have this strength I feel that my writing will be enforced greater.

3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.

My first draft of my photo essay included my beginning sentence of my introduction as a starter for my reader to under stand at first. The beginning sentence of my 1st draft is "Stephen x. pineda, an average 16-year old high school who had his main focus on his hobby as well as in putting outstanding effort in school ever since 9th grade." While going through the process of copy editing my photo essay entirely has improved by the last draft. My current beginning sentence of my final draft is "Before Reality Changers, I used to spend my Tuesday and Thursday afternoons at soccer practice while finding the time to maintain an average GPA with a blurry path to college. With the evaluation of coming from a road of distracted ideas to following a clear ideal path. After the whole process I see a big change of re-wording and see many different structures that explain greatly.

4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.

My main idea that I learned in writing is not the complicated words you put in text to make it sound real good but the simple words you scramble with flow and the sentences that are dedicated to be better refined.

This is due at the end of the day on Wednesday 5/27!

Magazine Article Reflection

1. What went well for you during the process of creating this magazine?

I believe that the whole layout was great. I felt the magazine process wasn't bad idea to make as an end-of-the year project. I really felt that the process was really quick to do. The functions in laying-out the writing pieces were really simple. The only struggled I had couple of minor confusions of small functions.

2. What challenges did you face as you moved from an early draft or idea to a final product?

The challenges that I faced were many at 1st. I thought I knew what copy-editing was until randy helped me realize. Randy said that complexity isn't always the best way to go. When it came to the copy-editing process, it took me several drafts like about 6 in total. I felt that each draft improved my writing, beginning the complex text to simple flow text took very good improvements from all drafts. The other challenge I had was basically trying to come up with a title and also trying to maintain my photo essay neat with good choice of wording.

3. What other examples of work—student and professional—stood out as exemplary and served as a good model for your own work?

An example of work that stood by me was the art project that I made based on Huey P. Newton & Bob Marley. I've used the skill of forming my text paragraphs smaller and creating them flow better. I have never felt this better in my chapter of progress due to my writing enhancing with newer techniques that better my writing style. The artwork in the project above was excellent, but the paper gave it juice to my project by explaining the pride resemblance of both comrades.